Hi Sammy, always one of the people who show up here. 🫡 Do note that I am also a "beginner" in this craft. Instead of a copywriter's eyes which I myself is still practicing.. I prefer to be your "potential customer" - someone who saw your ad and an aspiring copywriter who is looking for a course, community, or a coach that I can lean on. If I read the entire message, I know that you are giving me "good stuff education", however just reading the first few lines, a customer like me would ask "what's in it for me If I keep reading?" To me, the first sentences didn't connect with me / entice me to keep reading the next lines. That is all I can say as I am also a beginner like you but just thought of myself if I'm the one seeing your Ad somewhere. Let's rewatch the Fundamentals - keep hand writing copies. I think I've rewatched it myself for 4 times already 😅 And yes, let's keep showing up. I'll also post a copy myself in a bit for roasting 😆